Here we are again with another remarkable composition written by one of your classmates, in this case, by Pedro Cañabate Sánchez. As you know, I asked you to write an invented narrative with the title : Ed's frightening adventure. Here you have Pedro's composition. I hope you like it.
Ed's frightening adventure
Ed Williams, a zoo keeper, was used to feeding the sharks when, suddenly, one morning the sharks were not in their aquarium. This had already happened before, but this time all the sharks had escaped, which was really dangerous for the rest of the fish.
Ed ran quickly to the control centre but it was too late : sharks had spread and disseminated all over the aquarium. Unfortunately, he was the only one who knew how sharks behave. He put on the swimsuit and started desperately looking for the group of sharks. As he moved, he was watching the damage caused.
Three hours later, Ed managed to find the sharks before the group had reached the aquarium seals. In spite of the danger, he locked the gate with his own body. Amazingly, a little shark headed for the exit and bit his leg. At that moment, other workers rescued him and locked the exit. Fortunately/luckily, the shark only broke his leg and nowadays Ed is fully recovered and he walks perfectly well.
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| Image taken from Reutersmedia.net |
By Pedro Cañabate Sánchez, 2º Bachillerato A.
Quite an outstanding composition. As you will see, Pedro has used a lot of adverbs of opinion and linkers suitable for a narrative and his story is both interesting and appealing. Come on ! Why don't you post a comment ?
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